Beta Read Rhodesian War Manuscript

I have a 153,000-word narrative that follows the Rhodesian Bush War from 1960 through 1980, told strictly from the military vantage point with politics kept to a minimum. Before I move to the next draft, I need a fresh set of eyes focused first and foremost on clarity and overall readability. What I need from you The feedback I value most is whether each scene and transition makes sense to someone coming to the topic cold. If any passage feels confusing, repetitive, disjointed, or glossed over, flag it. Grammar slips and obvious typos should be marked as you see them, but please don’t spend time defining every piece of military jargon—assume the audience either knows it or can look it up. The middle chapters are where I suspect the narrative may wander, so your close attention there is especially welcome. Preferred workflow • Annotate the manuscript (Track Changes or in-line comments are fine) • Provide a brief summary report highlighting the main clarity issues you found, repeated information, skipped beats, and any structural hiccups. If you’ve beta-read long military or historical works before, that’s a bonus, but what matters most is a careful, honest critique that helps me tighten the story and keep the chronology crystal clear.

Project ID: 39719323