The Firmest Flower (first 500 words)
If you're looking for a well-developed, commercially and critically appealing plot, and a style combining literary skill with an urban finish, this is the right entry to pick. I loved the story, I'm passionate about writing the rest of it, and plan to do so even if I'm not picked. If allowed to write the rest of the story, I would continue with a story of Susan's divorce, their struggles in raising their children as toddlers, the dangers of the neighbourhood, keeping their children away from bad influences as they grow up, trying to keep the house together, and dealing with an adverse situation like criminal assault/ harrassment being inflicted upon one of the children. The story would start its falling action after the grand adverse event (which we could discuss as to what should be), with the women dealing with it in courage without men, and setting the children's lives back on track by helping them with studies, getting people to remove the victim's depression, etc.
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sumikanth
- 8 tahun yang lalu
Hi Excellentwebs. I thought that it would be better if I modified any work on your desire, so it would be best not to submit a new entry any way.
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sumikanth
- 8 tahun yang lalu
Hi, excellentwebs. I'm very honoured to receive a four star rating from you, and would like to thank you very much for your positive feedback. I would just like to ask you what I can do to modify my entry to get just that extra star. Should the vocabulary be better? I can do that easily. Is the flow not right? Tell me what needs to be done. Are you unsatisfied with just a little something you can't put your finger on? I feel like that too. If possible, I'll submit another version trying to have a better overall rhythm.
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Penganjur Peraduan - 8 tahun yang lalu
thank you
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